Good story, bad writing – Narborion Saga Review

Please read over your work, all of it carefully. Or have someone else look over it. Because the typos and awkward sentences are strong with this one. Fix this along with finding better names for just about everything, add a little more explanation of what things, significant events, and religious figures are. you have a five star worthy game on your hands.
Review by Lololololol etc. on Narborion Saga.